What is in a title?
Does it tell the same story as the poem itself?
William Carlos Williams
This Is Just to Say
I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox
and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast
Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold
~
The speaker is leaving a message, like a memo, an FYI.
As in "oh by the way.."
This is the tone I get from just the title.
But it is in the poem of course I get the sense of the real tone. A short path to an apology. The speaker doesn't say that they are sorry specifically, but they are asking for forgiveness.
Like a note left on an empty container or shelf by a roommate who had a case of the late night munchies. There is something so frustrating about that. They know they have done wrong. Even if it is as simple as eating a few plums.
Do people really need to put there names on everything? Sometimes.. I think the answer will have to be a yes. Here is something I wrote in response to This Is Just to Say by William Carlos Williams.
Breakfast
I awake
It is early, too early
I splash my face
I lace my shoes
The kitchen is crisp with morning chill.
The heat has yet to make it's presence known.
I open the fridge
My grip tightens on the handle,
My knuckles grow pale
My breakfast, my morning's sweet peace
is gone.
In it's place, a small paper
A few lines of hastily scratched gibberish
My house mate
like a masked bandit in the night,
strikes again
I close the door
I shake my head
I cannot eat paper
So what now I ask
Coffee and a morning smoke I suppose
Breakfast of champions
(Illustration- Unknown Artist)
I love your poem response Jenelle. I liked how you took on the perspective of the person who had their breakfast (or plums) taken, and how annoying it can be. But like Williams' poem, there is a lighthearted humor in your "Breakfast" response. I thought it was really well written- the lines "I splash my face/ I lace my shoes" is really well done (in rhyming face and lace) and just sounds really nice together when read aloud. Great job!
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